Scene from “A Family in Crisis the Story of Nessa”

Hey ya’ll there is a scene in my book/screenplay that I would like your advice about, You have a sixteen year old that gets in the car with a twenty eight year old married male! Not realizing that her mother who was chasing her down the street has fallen, and is stricken with a heart attack! She is currently fighting for her life! Nessa continues doing her thing, mad at the world, thinking everyone is against her. Nessa and the married man gets themselves in a situation which leaves them in dire straits or worse. If your the wife, how would you feel about finding out that your husband is found with a sixteen year old girl. Would you automatically assume something inappropriate is going on between them, Would you give him the benefit of the doubt, or would you focus on the dire straits or worse situation. Thinking about changing that scene and I’m curious as to what your reaction would be if you found yourself in that situation!. I like my writing to be as realistic as possible. and your comments would reImageally help to decide what direction I should go!!!


***Do you have a 16 year old Nessa in your Family or Circle???

Hey ya’ll it’s 315am and I’m on my grind, as you can see by the title above, The question is do you have a Nessa in your family or circle? I’m talking about Nessa a sixteen year old that physically could easily pass for twenty until she opens her mouth. A sixteen year old that is very intelligent, does well in school when she wants too! Nessa is the classic C student that could easily be an A student but seems to have an issue with authority.  You that sixteen year old that is constantly bumping heads with her mother but listens to her father. The sixteen year old that loves her family but seems to closer to her friends and usually has that one chick that she hangs out with all the time. I’m talking about Nessa, that 16 year old with a lot of sass, a lot of attitude and she can be disrespectful one minute to the point you want to smack the taste out of her mouth, but the next minute she can be so sweet and kind that makes you want to give her a hug.  The Nessa that can be very quiet and secretive when it comes to her family, but no matter what she does that absolutely makes no sense to you, Nessa still makes you love her to the point that you would go through hell and high water for her. Now I could go on and on but you get the point. Tell me do you have a Nessa in your family or circle and if so share one thing about your Nessa that is similar to mine, and also let me know if they have aspirations to be an actress!!!

…Heavy Out…Image